Another early update. Things were just sort of flowing, I guess. It was a fairly heavy chapter...kind of depressing to write. But the good kind of depressing; the cathartic kind. I don't know, I've been feeling kind of down for a while now, and writing some bonding scenes really helps me feel better.
Anyway. I suppose the question-answering will be brief for this chapter.
I think it's interesting how the opinions are divided about Tubs; some like him, some hate him, and some just think he's odd; all three of those are sort of how I feel about him. He's kind of an odd dude, like some fat, lazy bum/Santa Claus figure. It's weird, in a weird way. I guess he's just one of those characters that not even the writer can get a handle on.
@Ravenshade: TremorxMinnow kind of surprised me too; I knew when I was writing the first chapter that Minnow and Rumble would hit it off pretty well, but I didn't think that she and Tremor would get along quite as nicely. They did, though, which I guess is good, because they're better parents than Nightshade or Blight could ever be. Hopefully the Bullet-finding will be as interesting as you think it will; I'm looking forward to it too.
@Silverblossom: It seems that all the Twolegplace cats are rather secretive, especially since not all of them (especially Natasha and Mitch) approve of the new regime. We'll have to see what Carmelo & Flicka's exact partnership is, but I'm fairly certain it won't be good for the Clanners. Sorry it's agonizing. I could throw spoilers at you if you want, but I'm sure it wouldn't be as much fun at the end for either of us.
@PurplePanda: I see what you mean. semicolons have sort of become the new comma for me (I used to, throw in commas, where they didn't exactly belong, sometimes where it really, made no sense for me, to do so, which is probably why, my teacher, called me comma-happy xD), meaning that I overuse them and they just sort of pop out and explode everywhere. Plus I've been writing very flowish-ly, and it all comes out so fast that it's hard to ponder whether or not a semicolon belongs there or not. It's definitely a problem spot. However I do have a question: In one example you put the phrase as "She tried to resist for a moment, before simply relaxing; allowing the force to pull her further into the pine forest." I don't think a semicolon would actually work there, since "allowing the force to pull her further into the pine forest" can't stand alone by itself (I think it's a dependent clause) and I don't think semicolons are allowed to link a dependent clause to something else. Maybe I'm wrong, though; it's hard when I look at my own work. If it's not mine, I can pick the mistakes apart really easily (I got a 36 and 35 on the two English parts of the ACT, last time I took it, and those are pretty much all about grammar) but if it's mine I get all confused and foggy and messy.
@Priceless: We were talking about sumos as an occupation in my AP Gov class today, actually. Interesting. And it's not a problem, I understand that you're busy. I'm just happy you reviewed. :)
I suppose that's all.
